I would want some beta readers for my New book

[Avuhe]

Good day friends, I am working on a novel. And I want you friends to have a sneak peek into the draft version. This is my very first novel that I am actually putting out. The novel is secular and the story is set in Nigeria. Please guys I would love to hear your honest reviews. I would be glad to also hear comments from the likes of Ek Jonathan and Thomas Walker  I really enjoy their works and would like to learn from them. Below is the link to my blog  

https://draftnovel2024.blogspot.com/2024/10/chapter-1-homecoming.html

Edited October 23 by Avuhe

[Tortuga]

Can you give us a brief synopsis of the story?

[Avuhe]

Synopsis

 

Deji, a Nigerian-American, returns to Nigeria with the goal of exposing Senator Bala's corruption, involving embezzlement of international aid funds meant to improve healthcare in rural communities. Despite warnings from his fiancée, Ada, Deji pursues his mission with the help of his journalist friend, Tunde. However, unknown to him, Tunde is secretly working with Bala. As Deji gathers critical evidence, he becomes the target of a plot to frame him as a drug lord. He is arrested in a staged police raid, with planted drugs serving as evidence against him.

 

Meanwhile, Ada, left with a recording of the raid that could prove Deji’s innocence, becomes a fugitive. The police, acting on orders from Bala, declare her wanted, placing her in grave danger. Ada seeks refuge with her Aunt Ify, but they soon discover that a bounty has been placed on Ada’s head, and dangerous street gangs are closing in. With both the law and criminals after them, Ada and Deji’s fate rests in the balance of uncovering the truth and bringing Bala to justice.

 

The story weaves themes of betrayal, political corruption, and the struggles of standing up against a powerful and corrupt system. As Deji fights for justice, the involvement of the American Embassy brings international pressure, but time is running out, and the stakes couldn't be higher.

Please 🙏 I need feedback 

https://draftnovel2024.blogspot.com/2024/10/chapter-1-homecoming.html

 

Edited October 23 by Avuhe

[Avuhe]

56 minutes ago, Tortuga said:

Can you give us a brief synopsis of the story?

Synopsis

 

In Homecoming, Deji, a Nigerian-American, returns to Nigeria with the goal of exposing Senator Bala's corruption, involving embezzlement of international aid funds meant to improve healthcare in rural communities. Despite warnings from his fiancée, Ada, Deji pursues his mission with the help of his journalist friend, Tunde. However, unknown to him, Tunde is secretly working with Bala. As Deji gathers critical evidence, he becomes the target of a plot to frame him as a drug lord. He is arrested in a staged police raid, with planted drugs serving as evidence against him.

 

Meanwhile, Ada, left with a recording of the raid that could prove Deji’s innocence, becomes a fugitive. The police, acting on orders from Bala, declare her wanted, placing her in grave danger. Ada seeks refuge with her Aunt Ify, but they soon discover that a bounty has been placed on Ada’s head, and dangerous street gangs are closing in. With both the law and criminals after them, Ada and Deji’s fate rests in the balance of uncovering the truth and bringing Bala to justice.

 

The story weaves themes of betrayal, political corruption, and the struggles of standing up against a powerful and corrupt system. As Deji fights for justice, the involvement of the American Embassy brings international pressure, but time is running out, and the stakes couldn't be higher.

 

Please 🙏 I would need feedback from you friends 

 

 

Edited October 23 by Avuhe

[Tortuga]

27 minutes ago, Avuhe said:

The story weaves themes of betrayal, political corruption, and the struggles of standing up against a powerful and corrupt system. As Deji fights for justice, the involvement of the American Embassy brings international pressure, but time is running out, and the stakes couldn't be higher.

Please 🙏 I need feedback 

 

Thanks. That isn't something that I am interested in reading, so thank you for providing the synopsis.

[Dages]

Ho, I thought it would be a Paradise/JW story.
 

[Avuhe]

5 hours ago, Dages said:

Ho, I thought it would be a Paradise/JW story.
 

No it's not it is secular but I am working on one like that right now

[Tortuga]

1 hour ago, Avuhe said:

No it's not it is secular but I am working on one like that right now

Let us know when it is ready.

[New World Explorer]

On 10/25/2024 at 12:55 AM, Tortuga said:

Let us know when it is ready.

You know what I would like to read? Sci-fi mixed with Paradise theme ... 

Random person discovered time travel in 16th century (England) 

Travels to year 2900...ish  when Paradise is already here and before final test 

The story revolves around him being exposed to the truth. (The deal is he cannot travel back to his family, in order not to upset historical events..) 

He welcomes his family in resurrection ..

Someone with talent could really make this interesting. 

[Avuhe]

On 10/29/2024 at 6:13 AM, New World Explorer said:

You know what I would like to read? Sci-fi mixed with Paradise theme ... 

Random person discovered time travel in 16th century (England) 

Travels to year 2900...ish  when Paradise is already here and before final test 

The story revolves around him being exposed to the truth. (The deal is he cannot travel back to his family, in order not to upset historical events..) 

He welcomes his family in resurrection ..

Someone with talent could really make this interesting. 

This is a great idea to play with